Using the "General Topics" on page 110 of your text, draft 3 examples of one of your choice of topics 10-13. Please make paragraphs between 5-7 sentences and post them below.
10. We are surrounded by people with bad manners.
11. Most of what I really like is bad for me or someone else.
12. One can tell much about people by the way they eat [or dress, talk, react to crises, and relate to their family and friends].
13. I would be happier if I could divorce some of my relatives.
Being in high school you are surrounded by people with poor manners. The worse thing was walking in the hallways and to hear all of the screaming. Were people not told to use their inside voice when they were kids and have consideration for others? Walking in a hall way at the change of classes in a high school is like entering a war zone. The amount of screaming and profanity you hear is outrageous. It’s the type of noise that u wish you can just walk up to all of them and literally put a sock in it.
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ReplyDeleteThis is a good introduction paragraph, but I'd like you to rethink it as an example. What can illustrate the topic you chose? Think of a scenario!
DeleteI would be happer if i could divorce some of my relatives. The reason why i chose this topic is because really i feel there is no need for us to be family if we don't act like we are. One of my relatives that i would like to divorce is my uncle's wife. From the minute i was a child, she would ake care of me when my mom would go to doctor appointments, courts, or a meeting. As she would take care of me she'd call my mom every two seconds complaing how I'm such a pain in the butt, that i don't shut up, and that im too much to handle. Now i was only a child which was around the time when i was 3-4 years old, what do you expect out of a child whose only that young. From then on my mom knew she never liked me and my brothers. Everything after that her and my mom got into huge arguments and fights because this lady always had something to say about us, it's like she was so jealous or something. Til this day my family and i have no communication with her and never plan to, and that's why i see no reason for us to be family so I'm filing for DIVORCE!
ReplyDeleteI'd like to see you revise some of your notes to your reader. Statements like, "The reason why i chose this topic" are not necessary and make writing sound juvenile. Also, posing the question, "what do you expect out of a child whose only that young" doesn't work for your example very well. Also, remember that your examples will be stronger if you show, rather than tell. You can SAY "we fought" or you can describe what that actually means...
DeleteGoing to a restaurant during the dinner rush is like playing Russian roulette with a fully loaded gun. You know you’re going to get an attitude from someone you just don’t know who. Most of the time it’s going to come from the person waiting your table. Once this happens you know you’re in for a very touch and feel relationship with this waiter. The experience and go one of two ways bad or horrible. The servers always want to take previous anger out on a new customer. Giving and attitude and bringing the wrong food but this is easily solved you forgot your manners I forgot your tip.
ReplyDeleteI really like your perspective on this-- very sharp. There are some things I don't get, though, like " a very touch and feel relationship with this waiter." Also, remember, you 're coming up with examples of rudeness, not just giving your take on rudeness at a restaurant. I'd like to see your example comprise most of the paragraph to illustrate your point.
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ReplyDeleteTrough out my life without even realizing I have been doing a variety of things that usually people get disturbed by or feel uncountable with. Also the same ones are sometimes bad for me and others in a way or another, for example:
I. When I eat in public places and act like if I was home by eating improperly; talking loud, lifting my leg in top of another chair, etc.
II. I also loved junk food and we all know that we can find it anywhere anytime. Eating fast foods it’s something that is causing a lot of damage around the world.
III. One of my hobbies is to listen to music at loud. Sometimes I listen to music while I am in the bus or train and I can tell people don’t usually like to heart my music. When I noticed I usually lower the music but most of the time I don’t pay attention.
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Ok, so this is a good start. What I'd like you to do is to ILLUSTRATE the examples you gave in one paragraph each, using descriptive language.
DeleteWe are surrounded by people with bad manners.
ReplyDeleteOne thing I notice about people is that if they don’t know you personally or at all they don’t feel the need to be polite. One time I was in the grocery store picking up a few items for dinner. The time was around noon when most are shopping while there kids are in school. When I shop I like to browser through every single I aisle. I have a tendency to forget things. I was in an aisle with this elderly women and I sneeze. Not on her but proper way with my arm covering the sneeze. I look towards her to see if she was going to say Bless You and she didn’t. In a sarcastic way I suck my teeth together and said “well bless me “and walk out the aisle. This showed me that as old as she was some people just don’t have manners
Another bad habit I encounter was at a bar. I went to Posh bar in Times Square by myself; my partner was out of state on business. I’m just sitting at the bar by myself listen to music and chilling. There was this group of friend sitting next to me and had a lot to drink. This guy come between us to order a beer and started talking to the guy next to me and out of nowhere as soon the bartender hands him his beer he spills it all over. He offered an apology then asks me what I was drinking. Once I told him what I was drinking he orders me another beer and walk. I was puzzle by way he ask what I was drinking when he didn’t even buy me drink. At this point I felt his apology was phony and that it was rude of him to ask what I was drinking and not buy me another like he didn’t just spill a whole glass of beer on me.
One can tell much about people by the way they relate to their friends.
ReplyDelete•How guys choice to be more with they’re friends than being around with their girlfriend. People could read that person and say “wow” “ maybe his girl doesn’t have time for him, they just having problems, or maybe their giving each other space” it pretty much tells other people different ways to react. When they see that guys who are on a relationship they don’t spend it with they’re girlfriend they start over thinking them self’s. No one can tell much but like I said before other people say “actions speak louder than words”.
•People always have different ways to react towards other people relationship by saying “ if they see a girl with a other girl taking a picture and hugging their lesbian”. For example my mom friend Maria she saw a girl on the park with a other girl taking picture she started telling my mother “OH MY GOD LESBAIN”! I looked at her and told her don’t misjudge others by the cover of book without not knowing the true. People see things that aren't bad but to other do seem to be bad too. So we a lot of misjudging people everywhere. People need to think before they speak.
ReplyDelete•In this world we have many misunderstanding people if they see a marriage going bad for example if they're yelling at each other; than they start over thinking them self but don't dare to ask if everything is okay. I don't know why people worry about other personal problems when everyone in the world have them in life. It's called disappoint; because if you don't know the person than why care? If their not helping them or don't know them don’t jump into other people business because is none of anyone business at longest they ask which 80% of them won't and 20% will. I seen this in many different location like parks, house party, and most of the time in a restaurant. It's very disappointing when I see it happening it's like go to a room or do that some where else where no one can see or hear. It's respecting and shows more manners than others.
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ReplyDeleteIn my eyes, I would be much happier if I could divorce some of my relatives. It’s not because I want to be a jerk, but I just think that they could do way better. To me, they get married because they are blind. They can’t see what’s going on outside of the box, but I can. For Instance, my aunt is married with a guy who is very possessive. She has 3 kids with him; she is always working and doing the house chores. What does he do? Work and go spend his check at the bar. On top of that he doesn’t even let her come to New Jersey to see my mom. To me, that’s a man who is garbage! She could do so much better because she is beautiful and has a great heart.
ReplyDeleteA relationship in my family that I would want to divorce is my cousin. She has a husband who is very sarcastic!!! To me, in a marriage, it’s about spouses helping each other, not criticizing. This man just loves to criticize when she does something wrong, but in sarcasm! If he was my husband, I think I would curse him out every time he would say something. The whole point of being together is help one another grow, and love each other. He doesn’t do that. If I was a lawyer, I would’ve told my cousin to sign the divorce papers already, and set her up on a blind date.
ReplyDeleteSometimes I wish I was like Maury, so I can fix some relationships in my family. I know that I wasn’t there at the time when they met each other, but what I see now in the present, makes me wish that they weren’t together. Like my uncle, he is a big jerk to his wife. You would think that I would have my uncle’s back, but in this case, his wife is just out of his league. She has such a great heart, that she speaks to me more than my own uncle. She asks about my son and is a very good cook, but my uncle in return just fights with her too much. I can’t do anything because it’s not my business, but I wish I had the power to separate them and partner her up with someone just right for her. I just like seeing people happy not miserable. It’s a pretty rough life you have to go through when you have a spouse that isn’t very supportive.
ReplyDelete13. If divorcing relatives was possible and legal in the United States, it would come to a great benefit for mostly half of America. Reason being, there is always going to be someone in your family who you won't get along with. For example, I do not get along with my seventeen year old cousin. He believes he knows it all, but in true reality he is a baby learning how to walk! In other occasions, it can surprisingly be not getting along with a parent or guardian. When the situation becomes this deep, it might be more of a struggle for an individual.
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ReplyDeleteif i could file for divorce against some of my family members, i think ill be filing for it everyday. An entire group of people that i would divorce are my cousins from Long Beach, California. There related to me because their my aunt's kids. Since they live so far away we have no communication what so ever. I have never seen my cousins nor spoken to them ever in my life. You might be wondering if i have ever tried to have some kind of communication with them, well i have a couple times. I sometimes would message them through facebook, but never have i ever received a response from any six of them. There were times my mom or dad would call their house to speak to my aunt and when i would get on the phone to speak to my aunt, i would ask if i could speak to any one of her kids, but of course there was an excuse for every time i asked for them. I start to think maybe these people just don't want to talk to me, is it because they don't know me? Well that can't be it because I've tried getting to know them and for them to get to know me but it feels like i'm the only one that's trying. I feel that there's no reason for us to not have any communication because were family but if that's the way they want it then okay i guess a divorce it is!
ReplyDeleteBilly, one of a million people that i'm related to, acts like were not even close to related. I haven't seen this guy for a couple of years and really i don't plan on seeing him period. The reason why i dislike Billy is because he swears he's got it all made, basically a big show off. A couple of years ago when i last saw him, he was in a car and as he was driving i waved at him and instead of waving back to me he decides to stick the middle finger at me, i really don't know why he did that but it was real immature. Later that day he saw my mom and told her i was the one that stuck the middle finger at him while he was trying to say hi. My mom obviously didn't believe him because my mom knows i would not do that. After i heard that he said i was the one that stuck the middle finger to him, i just lost all my respect for him. I could never consider him as family anymore, i just wish i could divorce him and everyone else i mentioned in my other last two paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteIf I could divorce a relative, the first one in my list would be my father’s father, I can’t call him grandpa because he doesn’t deserve it, he’d never treat us like his grandkids. I was 7 years old when my father died. His father never came to visit us. Even though he had money he never gave us anything. My father’s sister lived next to my house. I remember one time “my grandfather” came to visit her, and brought some presents for her kids and he never thought about us, never showed any interest in getting close to us.
ReplyDeleteThe next relative in my list that I would be happy to divorce would be my uncle’s wife. He is my mom’s brother. When my mom came to live in the United States, I had to move in to my uncle’s house. He didn’t have a strong character, so his wife wore the pants at home. She made me clean the house everyday while my three cousins were watching television. My mom used to pay for everything, but she didn’t allow me to get anything from the refrigerator without her permission, of course the rule was just for me. She was a real witch.
My third relative in my list that I would like to divorce will be my cousin. She doesn’t know the meaning of being a family she was very selfish, she didn’t respect anybody, she was so insecure and unhappy that she tried to make other people miserable. Since I was living in her house, she took advantage of the situation and she used to take my money, my cloth, my jewelry, she wanted everything that I had. One day I saw her, and when I confront her she told my uncle I was calling her a thief. Of course nobody believed me so she definitely qualifies to this list.
In our daily lives we go through conflicts and arguments unexpectedly with people who have bad manners. For instance, One day, I decided to hangout with some of my friends to play some basketball at the park. When we got there the place was packed with people of our ages. Unitl, I kept an eye on a open court and started to run towards the spot. As I was running I noticed a group of guys were taking over the court that I was aiming for. I knew they saw me running for the spot because they were laughing in front of our faces. So all of us decided to play on the same court hoping the guys would find another place to play. I realized they were getting furious and noticed them leaving. In the end, we enjoyed the game of basketball during the sunset hours. I thought it wasn't polite for them to be laughing at our faces knowing that we were reaching for the open court.
ReplyDeleteIn the streets there are certain people who have bad manners while driving. While I was driving on a intersection street. I noticed that on my left side of the route there was a driver who wanted to pass by me on a red light. Sometimes I have notice these types of drivers who cause accidents just because they feel like being first on the front lane for no apparent reason. So I started to press on my horn on the driver to warn him that what he was doing was against the law. I realized that people with bad manners can cause actions without even thinking.
ReplyDeleteWhen we are surrounded by people with bad manners we tend to learn from their actions. For example, When I was heading to the post office I saw an elderly women walking to the front entrance of the door. Also, I noticed a teenage boy who was in front of the elderly women and didn't bother to hold the door for her. Since she was having difficulties to walk inside the post office. I decided to open and hold on to the door so that she was able to walk inside without being rushed. At that moment I knew the teenage boy showed bad manners in front of the elderly women, but at least I showed her that not everyone is the same.
ReplyDeleteGeneral Topic: I would be happier if I could divorce some of my relatives.
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One of my sister’s went through some financial difficulties. Since she didn’t have a place to go to, my boyfriend and I allowed her and her son to stay with us. It was nice in the beginning because my sister and I are close, but then I noticed some things. Although I never asked her for a dime; I did expect her to help out with food and cleaning. If she swept the floor once, that was a lot! I practically had to beg her to buy some food. After she left my apartment, she went on to tell my family and her friends that we fought her for food. Sometimes showing love can bite you, big time!
Example#2:
I made a purchase of a beautiful watch for my boyfriend a few years ago. He would only where it for special occasions. So, one night I had one of my brother’s baby-sit for us so that we could go out. On that night, he didn’t where the watch. The watch was where it always was, in its case. We get home and everything was fine, so we thought. The following morning we were cleaning the house as usual, but when I opened the watch case, it was empty! Before I run into conclusions and accusations, I figured that I would just look every, and anywhere in my room for the watch. We found out later on that it was indeed my brother that stole the watch. Apparently he needed it more than we did.
Example#3:
One night at my sister’s house, my boyfriend and I had gone over to watch a movie. At the time, my brother-in-law was not there, but then walked in the apartment and asked my boyfriend a ridiculous question. He stood in the middle of the living room and said, “Do you want to play the Irish game?” So he takes his T-shirt off and puts his hands on his waist, and asks my boyfriend to stand up. My boyfriend not knowing what in the world he was talking about, he did what he said. Then my brother-in-law walks up to my boyfriend and shoves him onto the wall with strong force. My boyfriend’s face went from white to red within seconds! The rest of this scenario was too crazy!
We are surrounded by people with bad manners.
ReplyDeleteAs a Union City resident I can tell that sometimes people do not use good manner in this town. It happens all the time when I go out to the stores on Bergenline Avenue I open the door to get inside the stores and guess what? There is always someone that goes trough while I am holding the door. These kinds of people are so rude they not even say “thank you” after they enter because they know someone is holding the door for them to get inside the store. I don’t like to fight but sometimes I feel to say “you’re welcome”. I really, really hate these bad manners.
We are surrounded by people with bad manners.
ReplyDeleteI gave my example on people with bad manners when they don’t say “thank you” after someone is opening the door for them. However there is the other part of the face, I have seen ladies with a stroller, struggling to open a door to get inside any public place. People know that these ladies need help with the door and they just stand behind them starring at them waiting until they can get inside the store. I like to know what people are thinking well if they are thinking, can they just have common sense and use their good manners to help others?
We are surrounded by people with bad manners.
ReplyDeleteOne day I was in a CVS store already in a line to pay. There were like two people in from of me, so this two people were call to pay and I was next to be call to pay suddenly a lady just came and went straight to the cashier to pay in my turn. I became very mad and of course I didn’t say nothing because that’s not my style I don’t like to get in to any argue with anyone. However I know that this lady has no good manners at all. I wonder if this people with bad manners ever learn the meaning of the word “manners”.
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ReplyDeleteMost of what I really like is bad for me or someone else.
-The way I give my all into a relationship, is bad for myself and for others. I tend to become blinded, I show my all, and never leave for imagination. At the end, the other, becomes used to certain things that no longer exsist. So it starts to hurt, and effect me with run-on arguments. Its bad for other people that I like to give my all, and perfer to put them aside. Usually we tend to leave those whom are good for the bad. Not caring if it bothers others and isn't good for yourself.
-Smoking is my addiction, like how a fish needs its water to live. The sensation I feel as I inhale, feels like traveling into a paradise. Although I am told, it affects my health,and changes my appearance. As it also makes damage for those who surround me at the moment. Second hand smokers tend to get more affected my the smoke. I don't know why we tend to let the world take over our lifes by pleasure, than true reality.
(by the way i dont smoke) haha
-I am a shopaholic, oh yes, its what I enjoy and love doing. I can not have one dime in my pocket because I will find something to waste it on. If I see something, I must buy it, because later on it won't be in stock. This is bad though, I will never learn to save up money for future purposes, or for instant emergencies. This is a bad influence for those who surround me. Also tend to be short on actual important debts. Money and luxury is very tempting, and valuable.
I love to cook, so i don't eat a lot of fast food. this one particular time when i decide to go to Wing Stop the costumer service skills were horrible. It all started the my first waiter showed me my sit, he was very polite and prompt about that but as soon as he brought met back the menu i never saw him again. I sat down and waited for 10 mins and no came to acknowledge me. After going to get another waiter to take my order and asking to speak the manager she came and came just to ask me what was the problem and told me to hold on she'll be right. i waited another 15 mins and the waitress brought out my food. i wasn't comfortable how the manger just blew me off and all i was really looking for was a so"sorry for your long wait your food will be out shortly'' but no one not even the manager said anything. i couldn't finish my food so i walk up to the counter to have them rap it up to go. Just as i thought i was leaving the cashier was called in the back and left without taking my money. i ad no cash on me and had to use my credit card and the made me wait 5 min too long and i left without paying.
ReplyDeleteI would be happier if I could divorce some of my relatives.
ReplyDeleteWhen I was young I always had someone in my family makes things worse for my mother and I. My aunt was one of them, she always use to tell my mom things that I supposedly did and was wrong. Most of them time she wasn’t even right, she always made my mother believe I was this horrible child. One day my mom confess to me that my aunt had said she saw me smoking, and this was when I was like 12 years old so you can imagine how my mother got. As young as I was I stood up for myself and I told my mother who you going to believe your daughter or her. I told her I could do a drug test for her just to believe me, and ever since that day my mother has supported me and always been on my side. She really need to mind her own business and if she really cared she would of said something to me not my mother and made the relationship between my mother and I worse.
My sweet was coming and of course my mom asked some of my relatives if they would help out with money or with whatever they could. Most of them of course agree to help, but it was up to that day to see who really was going to help. It was few days away from my sweet and one of my uncle’s who I was very close to since I was young didn’t pick up his phone. He was one of them who agree to help pay my limousine for my sweet as a gift and because he I was supposedly his “favorite”. I tried calling him for at least three straight days and didn’t pick. After that, I knew he was falling back on what he said he was going to pay. He lived far so I wasn’t able to see him and after my sweet passed that’s when he called my mother and I to tell us he didn‘t have the money on time. I was really close to him and for him to not even give me a reason on time why he couldn’t help did get me mad, he could of at least told me the truth and at least showed up to my sweet and helped out and not money wise and be there for me. Who knew the least people I expected to help were the ones who helped me, and the ones who I depend it on failed me.
My cousin and I grew up together and we consider ourselves like sisters. I had saved money in my drawer and of course she knew everything I owned and where everything was. I hadn’t checked my money or counted it if I had the same amount in a while. For some reason, one day I just decided it was time to spend some of my money and go shopping. When I checked my drawer I had at least a good amount of money missing. Right away I asked my parents if maybe they had borrowed some and they denied it. I though maybe one of my friends who came to visit stole money from me and I never noticed. Either way I never found out till later one by one of my other cousin who confess to me. She told me that my cousin who I was close to was the one who stole money from me because she supposedly really needed it. I confront my cousin about it and she said she was going to put the money back but she still didn’t have it now. I told her not to bother and to just never expect me to trust her again, she could of just asked me to borrow some.
10. There's plenty of people in this world with bad manners. For example when I used to work in Burger King. There would always be a rude customer. Always giving us nasty attitudes. Plenty of arguments with customers. Most of them are just very impatient with their food and want it quick, but there's no need to start fights or argument because that.
ReplyDeleteAnother example of bad manners is when me and my friends decide to go out and play some basketball. By the time we get to the courts it was full. So we just started to shoot the basketball and some kids were looking piss cause we start to play on their side of the court. They sometimes believe that the basketball courts were made just for them. I kept shooting around because I went down just to play some basketball. I believe he should of kept the nasty look to himself another sign of bad manners.
Sometimes there's employee's in stores that are extremely rude. I seen people and me personally asked a employee a question and they'll answer back with a nasty tone. Or just don't really help and find what you need. No likes to be rudely treated by a employee. That's how customers stop shopping at places. If they get rudely treated but either way there's always gonna be rude people with mad manners.
I would be happier if I could divorce some of my realtives
ReplyDeleteI had always been there for them, but when I needed help none of them help me at all. They deserve now the sympathy I have for them, none! When I got my green card they stop talking to me, they said now I think I own the world, it got worse when a went to Dominican Republic to meet my in-laws, just because I could take a vacation after 10 years. I decided to forget about them because the always were jealous because I had a got job, because I can speak better English than them, and I can keep going. In the other hand, my husband’s sister, she is so annoying always talking about money, how much she got, how successful she is, and how looser we are, we are going nowhere, because we don’t think. Last December we cut communication with her; it was becoming a problem between my husband and me. Now, that we have no relatives around us, and we live in peace.
Being in college some people don’t know how to act. Some people can’t stay quiet when taking a test. They don’t see that it is annoying to other people that are trying really heard to pass this class. Even when you tell them piles be quiet they still keep acting rood. Sometimes I think to myself. Why are we surrounded with people that have bad manners. Even when walking the hallway they are still rood to others like not looking were they are walking, or not saying excuse me when in the way of your path.
ReplyDeleteI also like going to the gym and there I feel like people have bad manners as well. Some people don’t like to shear the meshing that they are using. Some of them like to rest there on the meshing’s just because they don’t want others to tack it. I think that is very rude to me and to others. Some people just don’t like to get out of the area that you are working in as well
Some people have really bad manners. The worst is when you go out to a a place it can be a movie, restaurant or just for a walk. Some people just don’t know how to act when they go out. they tend to give you a bad look or bump in to you for no rezoned some even throw things at you wen walking. Mostly kids. When in a restaurant some people see that others ate waiting for a table and don’t want to get up and leave I think that we are surrounded by bad manners all around
I chose this topic because it caught my attention the most. Everywhere we go & look there are people with no manners. The two reasons I think people in our generation have no manners because they grew up like that or sometimes its because of their racist. I know when I say because of someones raise you think of discrimination and it has a lot to do with discrimination because until this day people have no manners towards others because of their nationality or the color of their skin. It sounds horrible but its true information. For example, a while person will hold the door for another white person & say thank you and your welcome but when it comes to a person that isn't white they will be rude and not hold the door and not say thank you or welcome; it sounds dumb but its true and its a big deal. No manners has a lot to do with
ReplyDeleteThe other reason is that people grow up with no manners and don't know how to act out their home and our country is full of it. So when I read this topic those are the two reasons I think of.
rudeness.
I would be happier if I could divorce some of my relatives
ReplyDeleteWe had never been close to each other, they had looked for me only if they needed to, I had always been there for them, but when I needed help none of them help me at all. They deserve now the sympathy I have for them, none!
One example is when I got my green card, my cousin stopped talking to me, he said now I think like if I own the world, it got worse when a went to Dominican Republic to meet my in-law’s family, just because I could take a vacation after 10 years, when I came back from my trip he didn’t talked to me anymore and, he was always jealous because I had a got job, because I could speak English, and silly things like that I can keep going.
Another example is my sister in law, she is so annoying, she focuses on money, how much she got, how successful she is, the nice house she got, she even wanted to control our money, also she was always comparing us with her at that point that she started to tell us how looser we were, that we are were going nowhere because we don’t think. Last December I got tired of her attitude and finally we cut communication with her; it was becoming a problem between my husband and me. I had to ask him to choose, that woman was driving me crazy.
Now, that we have no relatives around us, our lives are normal there are little issues like any family, and we know have no one watching us or talking bad about what do or don’t and we live in peace.
Most times where ever you go there are peolple who have bad manners, for example, in the elavator, sometimes there are people who just get in the elavator really fast without saying excuse me to any of the people who are already in the elavator and when they are about to get out they do not say excuse me either. THey have bad manners, but there is nothing we can do about it because no matter where we go we are most likely going to see people who have bad manners.
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